I was standing in the MRT. I saw a girl who was standing in front of me she wore a pink long woman’s dress. Her face is a little bit round. She has big eyes and long eyelash. She’s mouth lip is sexy. Her nose is small. She might be a Chinese, because she spoke Chinese with her friend. They must be new friend, because they were very polite. She was wearing a bracelet on each wrist. One was white jade, one was green. She was holding a white mixed black dot handbag. When she smiles, the hide dimple always on her face.
At last she helped a person who is blind, went out of the MRT. The she left. I thought she must be a kind girl.
Good observation, Kelvin. You need to know which tense to use. The observation was in the past, so you should write in past tense.
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When I was standing in the MRT I saw a girl standing in front of me. She wore a pink long dress. Her face was a little bit round. She had big eyes and long eyelashes. Her lips were sexy. Her nose was small. She was wearing a bracelet on each wrist. One was white jade, one was green. She was holding a white handbag with black polkadot. When she smiled dimples appeared on her face.
She might have been a Chinese, because she spoke Chinese with her friend. They must have been new friends, because they were very polite with each other.
Before getting off the train, she helped a blind person out of the MRT.
I think she is a kind girl.